So, I have been struggling over one particular issue in the story thus far and would like to ask for some reader opinion feed-back.
The issue is an intersection between the peculiarities of the elven language, and the method I have chosen to use when it's presented to the reader. You see, because I based it on an ancient language from Earth, it has no personally posessive pronouns such as his, her, your, their ext. The word for "me" can be used in a manner similar to how we use the word "my" though.
Because I am also choosing to present elven as it's English translation [in square brackets,] I have also chosen to accurately translate over this lack of personally possessive pronouns.
I think these things work well for presenting depth to the world, but I have lately been running into a point where the intersection of the two has been causing problems. This is in all references to members of royalty, such as the fairy queen.
You see, the elven language does make use of honorifics, so there would absolutely be some official manner of respect which is used to refer to the queen that would be the equivalent of "your majesty" or "your grace" or "her highness." However, that is exactly the problem. Every single one of the equivalent English honorifics used to refer to a royal, which are the things I would have to be translating the elven honorifics to, involve the use of a personal pronoun.
So far, I have just been using "the queen" in the advanced chapters I have been writing, but that really comes off as stale and lacking in weight, especially when it's just used in repetition like that. You see, I definitely have a problem.
So, this is ultimately about how this story is perceived by the readers, so I thought I would seek some reader opinions. I will not necessarily go with the exact results of the poll, but it will be very likely that it factors in to my final decision on this matter. Please do tell me what you all think.
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